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What You Should Notice by ~amor1of1pen:iconamor1of1pen:



You looked when I was sad
And asked to help me out.
Confused as what you said to me,
I thought I'd just try doubt.

You didn't know what it was
Or why right then and there,
You looked about to slap me,
Said you wouldn't really care.

Wondering what would happen next,
I hid my head in shame.
For why you helped me then, I guess
I'd always do the same.

Still crying from the lack of life,
And breathing, cursed by soul,
I wanted to just sit and die,
Become as still as coal...
©2007-2009 ~amor1of1pen
:iconamor1of1pen:

Author's Comments

Dedication: NA

Written: Somewhere around October 2005.

Behind the Writing: This poem is ancient! Haha, I don't know what to say about it except that it's a bit depressing to read, as with most of my other older poetry.

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:iconettolrahctedarkqueen:
you're right! it is a bit depressing. but it's still very well written like all your other poems. i like it very much!

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you're dead! have you heared the news that you're dead? no one ever had nice words to say, i think they never liked you anyway.

(\__/) This is Bunny. Copy Bunny into
(O.o ) your signature to help him
(> < ) on his way to world domination!
:iconettolrahc-poetry:
lol this would be my second comment on here! anywho... love this poem!
:iconxforgottenxbeautyx:
hmm sad..but moving

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the grounds opening up. i'm falling down below
an endless fall into a place that i don't think a child should know.
and i'm screaming out a name that could never pass my lips.
the poison in my veins that got me through his kiss.
:iconamor1of1pen:
Yeah..:hug: Thank you!

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:iconamor1of1pen:
lol, i like getting comments.

thanks for faving! :D

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Light a candle on that website. We don't need your money; we just need your help.
:iconamor1of1pen:
..uhh, thanks? lol; so few words. :) Thank you!

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[link]
Light a candle on that website. We don't need your money; we just need your help.
:iconettolrahctedarkqueen:
aww. you're welcome :hug:

--
you're dead! have you heared the news that you're dead? no one ever had nice words to say, i think they never liked you anyway.

(\__/) This is Bunny. Copy Bunny into
(O.o ) your signature to help him
(> < ) on his way to world domination!
:iconamor1of1pen:
:hug:

--
[link]
Light a candle on that website. We don't need your money; we just need your help.
:iconxforgottenxbeautyx:
lolz your welcome, little words i know, didnt know what to say but that...its very beautiful, shows feelings.

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the grounds opening up. i'm falling down below
an endless fall into a place that i don't think a child should know.
and i'm screaming out a name that could never pass my lips.
the poison in my veins that got me through his kiss.

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